Raindrops dampen four seasons
Sawing a black Stradivarius instead of wrists
Having lost my right to joy and spring
“The Dark Side” is what I have left
Luke’s mom had channeled legal force
Citing “irreconcilable differences” for divorce
I’ve given up pride attempting to serenade her
You may call me “Busker,” or
“The Artist Formerly Known as Darth Vader”
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Think I might just comment “the force is strong with this one”…poor Darth, don’t you just want to give him a hug to stop him sawing his wrists? Just another misunderstood megalomaniac!
What a clever take on the prompt! Even with the playful, tongue-in-cheek tone of this piece, you actually made me feel sorry for poor DV! Ha! And I think you draw this sympathy by playing the tone all the way to the end, betraying no gives. Nice!
So Darth lost his panorama mamma and had to take to the streets, eh? I’m lovin it, especially the rhyme which you seldom do but works so well here. That second line is sneaky and excellent.
Think you’re right about DV’s popularity making a comeback. Kept hearing about how people loved the Superbowl commercial w/the small kid impersonating him.
Here’s the story behind my poem. I am such a nerd-of-a-different-sort, I didn’t even SEE Darth Vader. I saw street performer working to be heard for his violin playing art. I thought, “Wow. he is so courageous to be so outrageous like that. All dressed up in that black outfit like that… who is that character… oh, well. Not sure but wow. Maybe I should dress in character and do some street performing? Hmmmm.” and there you have the story behind my sympathetic poem. *thanks for your comment!*
Raindrops dampen four seasons
February 20, 2011 at 12:19 am
A spine tinglingly hard act to follow. Wow.
(Great audio. I must try that.)
February 20, 2011 at 12:48 am
Enjoyed your challenge response very much, RG. Lots of truth to it.
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February 20, 2011 at 12:39 am
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February 20, 2011 at 2:37 am
“Having lost my right to joy…” and how this short poem speaks of love in a ‘dark’ hue is well done, Adam! Thanks for sharing it.
February 20, 2011 at 4:38 am
LOVE this, Adam, especially the “irreconcilable differences” and
“Sawing a black Stradivarius instead of wrists”
Clever and fun!
February 20, 2011 at 4:48 am
Wow. Stunning response. Love the word play.
February 20, 2011 at 5:39 am
This takes me to the memory of someone I wouldn’t like to talk about
Dustus
February 20, 2011 at 5:40 am
May the Force saw with thee on that bow of self-eviscerating gut.
February 20, 2011 at 6:52 am
lol thanks
February 20, 2011 at 7:13 am
He’s standing on a street corner, playing as accompaniment to Lady Gaga. Good one, Adam.
February 20, 2011 at 8:01 am
“möge die macht mit dir sein…”
great response to the prompt – and you really sticked with darth vader..with the dark side…smiles…kudos adam
February 20, 2011 at 8:31 am
Und mit Ihnen 🙂
February 20, 2011 at 8:22 am
absolutely brilliant and imaginative. Quite a way to fund his child support checks.
February 20, 2011 at 8:28 am
ok, didn’t see that coming !…I dig the human mind !!!
I went another direction
Peace, hp
February 20, 2011 at 9:00 am
It is always a pleasure to see where you take the prompts !!
February 20, 2011 at 9:10 am
Think I might just comment “the force is strong with this one”…poor Darth, don’t you just want to give him a hug to stop him sawing his wrists? Just another misunderstood megalomaniac!
February 20, 2011 at 9:29 am
What a clever take on the prompt! Even with the playful, tongue-in-cheek tone of this piece, you actually made me feel sorry for poor DV! Ha! And I think you draw this sympathy by playing the tone all the way to the end, betraying no gives. Nice!
February 20, 2011 at 10:08 am
Very clever. I like it!
February 20, 2011 at 11:23 am
LOL great focused work.
February 20, 2011 at 11:42 am
lol that was short and to the point!’channeled force’…priceless!
February 20, 2011 at 11:58 am
So Darth lost his panorama mamma and had to take to the streets, eh? I’m lovin it, especially the rhyme which you seldom do but works so well here. That second line is sneaky and excellent.
February 20, 2011 at 12:07 pm
LOL Sorry about that typo. On the bright side (as opposed to “the dark side” ) kind of amusing. Thanks, hedgewitch
February 20, 2011 at 12:21 pm
So clever! I loved the way you wove star wars into the music.
February 20, 2011 at 2:36 pm
Darth Vader appears to have regained his popularity…thanks for a fine reading of your poem…I enjoyed it.
February 20, 2011 at 2:48 pm
Think you’re right about DV’s popularity making a comeback. Kept hearing about how people loved the Superbowl commercial w/the small kid impersonating him.
February 20, 2011 at 3:15 pm
oh, i hope that’s not a stradi. it’s rainingggggggggggg…
February 20, 2011 at 3:40 pm
Totally captures the pain of divorce – powerful irony in the sawing of the violin “instead of wrists”. Wonderful take on the prompt.
February 20, 2011 at 5:13 pm
LOLOL. and your take is funny.
Here’s the story behind my poem. I am such a nerd-of-a-different-sort, I didn’t even SEE Darth Vader. I saw street performer working to be heard for his violin playing art. I thought, “Wow. he is so courageous to be so outrageous like that. All dressed up in that black outfit like that… who is that character… oh, well. Not sure but wow. Maybe I should dress in character and do some street performing? Hmmmm.” and there you have the story behind my sympathetic poem. *thanks for your comment!*
February 20, 2011 at 8:09 pm
This is just outstanding storytelling. What a great take on the picture.
February 20, 2011 at 11:46 pm
Quite an enjoyable read…but Darth Vader leaving the dark side… that’s a tough sell. : )
February 21, 2011 at 2:32 pm
What fun! A great poem, so much in so little. Love, loss, struggle, mirth, self deprecation, yet, what affirmation, relished! Lovely.
February 21, 2011 at 6:16 pm
Fabulous! Thoroughly enjoyable and entertaining!
February 21, 2011 at 11:56 pm
I so so so loved that commercial! LOL classic, too funny, wonderful.
As you can tell, I didn’t watch the football game.
OK, now I have to go back and re-read you poem. Your “thunder” was stolen…
…she channeled legal force! Wonderful take on the prompt.
Now I have to go back and watch that commercial. I might steal it over to my blog… 🙂
February 23, 2011 at 5:33 pm
Excellent poem. Love the bit about the Stradivarius, being a musician.
February 27, 2011 at 4:32 pm
Lol! Despite not being a Star Wars fan, this is great!]
🙂
(I surfed over via Bookstains)
March 17, 2011 at 7:28 pm
You must have had sooooo much fun with this. 🙂