To Walk Away… One Stop Poetry Challenge
*The following poem is offered in response to the One Stop Poetry Sunday Picture Prompt Challenge. This wonderful prompt was shot by photographer KJ Halliday, featured today on One Shoot Photography Sunday. Come check out some great shots & the interview!
To Walk Away…
Upon gray pedestal of water
Blazing red distant time fades
Blushing grace, saunters gone
Can’t help thinking I was wrong
Hell might be not knowing
When you want her to walk away
Part hoping she could turn around
While feelings beg for change
Dustus Blog 
January 9, 2011 at 12:14 am
Wow, absolutely perfect words for the photo…she’s taking the heat away with her 🙂 Very nice Adam
January 9, 2011 at 12:27 am
You present that ‘approach-avoidance’ emotion found in a relationship well in these lines.
January 9, 2011 at 12:33 am
While feelings beg for change! – just perfect 🙂
January 9, 2011 at 12:33 am
Stunning piece matching perfectly with the image. Nice pull aways as well.
January 9, 2011 at 12:50 am
Thanks Everybody, glad for the positive feedback. Cheers
January 9, 2011 at 12:58 am
Amazing photograph, hope to come back later to see more of her work. FANTASTIC writing as always!
January 9, 2011 at 1:17 am
The image the poem paints goes so well with the actual photograph. great! :]
January 9, 2011 at 1:30 am
so beautifully collaborated with the photo. lovely work!
January 9, 2011 at 2:01 am
You are a true artist and poem. You painted a lovely word picture.
January 9, 2011 at 2:07 am
Stunning!
January 9, 2011 at 2:57 am
Love the image – the poem fits it beautifully
January 9, 2011 at 3:50 am
beautiful words 🙂
January 9, 2011 at 4:59 am
I relate, a beautiful poem Dustus
January 9, 2011 at 5:00 am
Well considered poem for the photo. I enjoyed it a lot. I had a different take as I have known red walls by streams. I think this does look as though the speaker might be a little teared up so your take is a good one. Gay @beachanny
January 9, 2011 at 7:17 am
Sad and poignant as she walks away taking the responsibility with her. Beautiful and I agree with Gay, very well thought out. Left hoping that some modicum of peace can be found after her departure.
S
January 9, 2011 at 7:49 am
Very nice.
January 9, 2011 at 7:57 am
I do need new vocabulary because all the One Shots I commented today had ‘beautiful’ in my comment. =D
The words match the picture and add some sadness to it. The poem is brilliant. Thanks for sharing.
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January 9, 2011 at 8:15 am
beautiful take on the prompt adam with all the disruption, change and loneliness this photo contains – i like!
January 9, 2011 at 9:05 am
The photo has a kind of push me – pull you sense about it. You give it an intense, personal intrepretation. Well done, Adam.
January 9, 2011 at 9:28 am
the last line is so true…feelings are many time begging. Nice.
January 9, 2011 at 10:58 am
Really like this one–a perfect description of that raw nerves feeling you get when something’s not right, but you don’t want to let go. And as always, you use one word where others might need ten. Very fitting interpretation of the mood of this photo.
January 9, 2011 at 11:29 am
Yep, that’s that unsettled, contradictory, push me pull you kind of feeling, isn’t it? Very nicely done, Adam.
January 9, 2011 at 12:14 pm
The blurring red photo is described nicely by your poem which seems to portray mixed emotions and confusion or rather a sadness about what the speaker wishes for versus how things actually are.
January 9, 2011 at 12:19 pm
took your challenge and now I busy reading the others 🙂
January 9, 2011 at 12:50 pm
Wonderful take on an image raging with feelings! In your hands with fitting-so-controlled words, mixed emotions are disentangled. I love the the first line: “gray pedestal of water” describes for me how we turn liquid when in love, how passion melts our bones, our brains or that seat where we cast our will. Thanks, Adam!
January 9, 2011 at 1:28 pm
Great interpretation of the image, the indecision about your emotions that you describe sounds really heartfelt and intense. Wonderful share.
January 9, 2011 at 1:55 pm
Perfect. Everything was perfect.
January 9, 2011 at 3:05 pm
Red hot love, heat of the moment, wrong words said. . . situations nad emotions we all recognize. Your poem wonderfully complements the image.
January 9, 2011 at 3:49 pm
Fading…sauntering…indecision…
Good word choice and feel in your work for the pic, very appropriate, as they well-capture that hazed, departing sort of vibe it emanates. Uncertainty looms in the photo, as here in your work, and you play it up to the peak of emotion, addressing a pain and a memory many know all too well. Regret, emotional fumbles…you can see an internal struggle here, staring after the fleeting image.
January 9, 2011 at 4:11 pm
ah yes, those feelings “beg for change”– great job, Adam–xxxxj
January 9, 2011 at 4:58 pm
Love the second stanza.
January 9, 2011 at 5:46 pm
Excellent!
January 9, 2011 at 7:31 pm
you brought a lot to the picture.
January 9, 2011 at 10:27 pm
Poignant and ringing. I love the shifting rhyme scheme, it lends a sense of metamorphosis to the poem that is quite lovely.
January 9, 2011 at 10:30 pm
OH! as well as your use of feminine rhyme, it’s subtle and gentle, and I only noticed there were no hard & masculine rhymes on my third reading.
January 10, 2011 at 1:31 am
hmm like the duality
part wanting her to return and part wishing her to leave
we have all been in that red mist
here’s to another week eh???
Hugs form the Moon
January 10, 2011 at 6:01 pm
This resonates with me.
Excellent
January 11, 2011 at 7:04 pm
I like! Thanks for sharing