The Arrow Shot (One Stop Poetry Picture Prompt Challenge)
*The following poem is offered in response to the One Stop Poetry Sunday Picture Prompt Challenge. Today’s photomanipulation was created by photographer extraordinaire Claudio Mufarrege, guest interviewee for One Shoot Sunday. All poets are welcome to take part in the challenge.
The Arrow Shot
If feelings could ever save me
Let it be right now
Birdsong evaporates to air
Your fall will not crash down
Life is no Titanic
Though barge in angles seem
Declining off corrosive walls
She spreads angelic wings
God, you think me simple
Love saves a human being
The arrow shot from Cupid’s bow
Piercing noble dreams
December 19, 2010 at 12:33 am
Beautiful words, beautiful photo
December 19, 2010 at 3:18 am
“Let it be right now”, let love save me (us) right now! Wonderful poem, Adam! I love how it slides into the unexpedted–“The arrow shot from Cupid’s bow/Piercing noble dreams”. Thanks!
December 19, 2010 at 5:52 am
If feelings could ever save me…I really like that line
December 19, 2010 at 6:17 am
the first stanza is a breath taker Adam…! how i love it..you are touching it with elegance and grace..Fabulous post!
cheers my friend..and Merry Christmas..:)
December 19, 2010 at 7:39 am
Eloquent and poignant Adam. Particularly like the line “God, you think me simple” Could mean many things!
December 19, 2010 at 9:44 am
That pose of the figure in the photograph – it is like Kate Winslet in Titanic. And it does suggest an angle, and love. Good one, Adam.
December 19, 2010 at 9:59 am
Lately I have been feeling life is Titanic…thanks for quelling my fears
December 19, 2010 at 10:30 am
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December 19, 2010 at 10:38 am
Beautiful images created through your words only enhance this fascinating photo.
December 19, 2010 at 10:50 am
A good response to the photo prompt.
December 19, 2010 at 12:08 pm
Awesome poem Adam.
I really liked the last two lines of this.
Great imagery and i like that rhyme scheme too.
I haven’t written anything like this in a while
December 19, 2010 at 12:40 pm
lovely dustus….noble dreams…yes we must hold these dreams…bkm
December 19, 2010 at 12:59 pm
Declining off corrosive walls
She spreads angelic wings
– Simply beautiful against all odds…
December 19, 2010 at 1:23 pm
An effective mix of the sublime and the prosaic, the complex and the obvious. I like the way the poem starts to spiral around the barge line, and then washes itself up on the conclusion with a nice feeling of inevitability and tension released.
December 19, 2010 at 1:39 pm
Yeah, she made me think of that iconic scene from “Titanic”, too. And, indeed, love saves a human being.
December 19, 2010 at 1:46 pm
I agree with Glynn, the figure does remind me of Kate Winslet, also. Without love life would be oh so sad.
Thanks for your visit and nice comment.
December 19, 2010 at 1:59 pm
I love the layers of meaning in each line especially “God, you think me simple”
December 19, 2010 at 2:40 pm
Your opening lines are lovely.
December 19, 2010 at 3:05 pm
there’s a lot written in between these lines as well in yours adam…
fantastic poem – love the opening lines esp. and also “lord you think me simple” – a lot just in this one line..would love to hear you read this
December 19, 2010 at 3:18 pm
Nice, simple and brilliant. Really enjoy your writing.
And you’re extra awesome because you’re also an Adam.
December 19, 2010 at 4:21 pm
love the second stanza ‘Life is no Titanic
Though barge in angles seem
Declining off corrosive walls
She spreads angelic wings’
awesome write!
thank you
December 19, 2010 at 4:23 pm
very deep, very well written
December 19, 2010 at 5:40 pm
Ah, Cupid’s arrow skewering noble dreams and a love that saves … fascinating. *wanders off, pondering*
December 19, 2010 at 5:53 pm
Very interesting take. I can see the woman as a figurehead. Loved the imagery in your poem.
December 19, 2010 at 6:20 pm
not that far from mine…I like it.
December 20, 2010 at 12:50 am
The abstract art of the photo has translated very well into the words of your poem. I love the juxtaposition of the corrosive walls and angelic wings.
December 20, 2010 at 11:06 am
Wishing for salvation – a beautiful hope, slapped with what I think, is reality. The contrast of imagery is splendid, the beautiful with the horrible. Such image, such symbol – lovely.