Rain on the Sidewalk
Taps give into thunder
Sky tears apart
Missing ozone
Wet land heart
Time to save
What you forgot
Rain on the sidewalk
Pattering lots
Frozen splash
Bubbling drops
Brimming wonder
Shuttering shot
Pain that washed
Imagining free
Rainy days puddle
Cleansing daydreams
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August 10, 2010 at 3:58 pm
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August 10, 2010 at 4:04 pm
time to save what u forgot,
…
thoughtful line…
great poem!
August 10, 2010 at 4:30 pm
Hi Jingle. Appreciate you stopping by! Glad you like this poem. This is one of those that was definitely inspired by the image first. cheers 🙂
August 10, 2010 at 4:05 pm
some great visuals adam…taps into thunder…i love storms…to stand in them and feel their power…i think they are cleansing…happy one shot! and thanks for being a marvelous host!
August 10, 2010 at 4:32 pm
We’ve had some crazy storms this summer with the out-of-control humidity! Storms are great for daydreaming, and writing. cheers, Bri
August 10, 2010 at 4:21 pm
I love storms too. Your words evoke both sound and images, making this storm very real. very nice. And thanks for being our host this week, Adam.
August 10, 2010 at 4:35 pm
Thanks Patti. Always wanted to take a picture of raindrops in action so to speak. thanks for commenting on the sound and image. More so, thanks for being a great part of One Shot!
August 10, 2010 at 4:30 pm
like your rain on the sidewalk…Shuttering shotPain…wow…some cool expressions… and the picture makes me wanna dance in that rain…
August 10, 2010 at 4:36 pm
Ha! I didn’t dance in the rain, but I sure did get soaked trying to take that picture, just about laying on the ground. lol Thanks, Claudia! 🙂 Always look forward to your One Shot Poetry posts!
August 10, 2010 at 4:47 pm
The rhythm and pace reflects the energy of the picture. Well done. As you saw I have posted two poems this week. On not saying hello is new but Kingpin Baby was posted up on a quiet Sunday so I thought I’d give it another outing. Both are adaption of different formal poetry forms – pantoum and sonnet.
August 10, 2010 at 11:32 pm
Enjoying your work, and thanks for the compliment. We lacked some structure on One Shot Sunday, mainly due to its newness, as well as my own 🙂 We’ll have a link system set up for it next time, so please join us again. cheers
August 10, 2010 at 4:49 pm
Hi Dustus!
I, too, am from Michigan and while reading your poem i could smell the worms. (THis is a good thing.)
Thanks,
Templeton
August 10, 2010 at 11:35 pm
LOL it is a good thing 🙂 Great to meet a blogging Michigander. cheers, Templeton
August 10, 2010 at 4:54 pm
Ah rain… Can be so much to so many! Enjoyed the possibilites and the multiples you offer, “Brimming wonder.. Shuttering shot.. Cleansing Daydreams” nice work!
August 10, 2010 at 11:37 pm
Thanks, Justin. Ah rain… different thoughts to so many. Very true, my friend. Thanks for participating in One Shot! cheers
August 10, 2010 at 4:56 pm
the rains will return here in CA come October and – rain is our winter and bringing memories and dreams and reason to write….lovely image in photo and word…bkm
August 10, 2010 at 5:42 pm
Thank you… bkm. So you’re from sunny Cali. We definitely have very different winters! lol
August 10, 2010 at 5:03 pm
an amazing photo…did you lay in a puddle taking it! The words suited this so well..bubbling drops & shuttering shot…happy One Shot..cheers Pete
August 10, 2010 at 5:45 pm
Of course, Pete… for the sake of art, and plus I was bored the other day when it was pouring out —was doing my laundry at the time anyway. lol
August 10, 2010 at 5:08 pm
Great words. I’m another who loves a good thunderstorm.
August 10, 2010 at 5:47 pm
Me too, thunderstorms are good for daydreaming.
August 10, 2010 at 5:51 pm
I really enjoyed the prosody and the way this poem reached out to the senses. This is my favorite one of yours, so far. But maybe that’s just because I love the rain! 🙂
August 10, 2010 at 6:12 pm
Oh thanks very much. Always happy when a peer likes the newest one best. Awesome! cheers, Sparrowsong!
August 10, 2010 at 6:06 pm
I am a winter person Adam..i love rains and storms..i feel nature at its best when ragging..lovely poem! enjoyed every word..:) glad you are our host this week too..cheers mate 😉
August 10, 2010 at 6:12 pm
I enjoyed reading your wonderful poem. Thank you so much for visiting my blog today and leaving your comments
August 10, 2010 at 11:39 pm
Appreciate the feedback, Neva. Glad to see you participate with the One Shot gang. cheers
August 10, 2010 at 6:16 pm
I feel the same way, Abeer, though I must admit the sunny warm summer has been very nice this year. Must enjoy it while it lasts. Doesn’t take much time for MI to get chilly in Fall—burrr… though I like that too. cheers
August 10, 2010 at 6:35 pm
it’s wet season here,
“time to save what (I) forgot…” Great Post Adam, and I love the picture!
August 10, 2010 at 8:32 pm
Doni, your poetry has been stellar. Thanks for sharing on One Shot Wednesday! Really appreciate that. cheers
August 10, 2010 at 8:37 pm
It’s wonderful to hear this read, to feel the rhythm and hear the rhyme, to “see” all the different way the water falls.
Thank you for stopping by to read “Lean Into the Idea” and for leaving such a lovely comment.
August 10, 2010 at 11:42 pm
Thank you, Maureen, for your post and kind words about my poem. Great one you posted today. cheers
August 10, 2010 at 8:39 pm
Yeah, there’s definitely a kind of emotional release that sometimes accompanies the shedding of clouds’ tears. Wonderful picture words here, Adam. 🙂
August 10, 2010 at 11:43 pm
Hi Tony. Gonna add you to my blog roll. Always appreciate your comments.
Thanks 🙂
August 10, 2010 at 9:10 pm
time tosave what you forgot…love that!
August 11, 2010 at 10:36 am
🙂 Thanks always, Suzicate
August 10, 2010 at 9:22 pm
this is beautiful. i love the photo, and the way your heart bleeds with the rain.
August 11, 2010 at 10:47 am
thanks. Heart bleeding rain… very poetic.
August 10, 2010 at 9:28 pm
I like the water metaphors — the dripping, dropping moving on to cleansing. Nice one.
August 11, 2010 at 10:48 am
Thanks, Glynn. Grew up near the ocean; been partial to water scenes ever since.
August 10, 2010 at 9:43 pm
Even without the photo, I can see the raindrops through your words. Beautiful.
I’m curious, how did you keep your camera from getting wet?
August 11, 2010 at 10:49 am
Kept the camera mostly dry by covering it with a small plastic bag that I cut up a bit. Cheers, CM
August 10, 2010 at 10:11 pm
This is such a great poem that I’d love it if I weren’t so sick of rain. (Sorry-it’s pelting against my window AGAIN).
August 10, 2010 at 10:12 pm
By the way, my one shot is at http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/08/10/my-old-woman/
August 11, 2010 at 10:51 am
It’s about to rain here again too. looking forward to your poem, Teresa. thanks
August 10, 2010 at 10:54 pm
Love this Adam, the next time I go out in the rain to wash away my troubled mind, cleansing the daydreams I’ll smile for the thought of your poetry, lol!!! 🙂 Could hear the rain falling from your wonderful words, well done! Superb! 🙂 Awesome! 🙂 ~April
August 11, 2010 at 10:53 am
Very nice of you, April. Always appreciate your kind encouragement 🙂 smiles
August 10, 2010 at 11:25 pm
very very beautiful..
time to save what u forgot..
memories of the monsoons which i enjoyed a lot when i was a kid! now time is just too fast to savour that feeling..
thanks for this.. LOVED it.!
Leo
August 11, 2010 at 10:54 am
Time is getting too fast to savour, or at least it often feels that way. Thank you for the nice comment. cheers!
August 10, 2010 at 11:38 pm
Nice Adam.
August 11, 2010 at 10:55 am
Thanks, Cin 🙂
August 10, 2010 at 11:42 pm
Wow you have a wonderful capacity for sound. Your poetry is so musical. You have a great capacity for bringing the sound of what you’re writing into the poem, while also giving it emotional depth and meaning. Well done. I admire this.
August 11, 2010 at 5:01 pm
Thank you, Gay. That’s very kind and I appreciate it.
August 11, 2010 at 4:25 am
I love the rain and I love this piece.
Your last stanza really does it for me
“Pain that washed
Imagining free
Rainy days puddle
Cleansing daydreams”
The idea of cleansing days dreams is a wondeful thought
August 11, 2010 at 5:03 pm
Hi Gwei Mui. Glad to see you return for One Shot! Thanks for your comment 🙂
August 11, 2010 at 5:10 am
Great poem Adam!
I like short lines that rhyme, gives it a nice rhythm.
August 11, 2010 at 5:03 pm
Hey Magnus! keep up the good work. Glad you’re part of the One Shot Poetry gang!
Thanks.
August 11, 2010 at 7:26 am
WOW! A beautiful poem with soft lines and a nice tone as you read the lines. I love to hear it rain, and can do some of my best sleeping during it. These lines are my favorite too. They truly do speak to me.
Pain that washed
Imagining free
Rainy days puddle
Cleansing daydreams
August 11, 2010 at 5:04 pm
Listening to the rain can be soothing, Viola 🙂
Always glad when you like my poems.
August 11, 2010 at 8:33 am
Oh the cadence of this one
loved it
and that photo
wow wow wow
August 11, 2010 at 5:05 pm
thanks, suz. You made me reconsider soap today 🙂
August 11, 2010 at 9:38 am
I like the way you paired-up words. Nice one!
August 11, 2010 at 8:59 pm
Thanks, Eric. It’s nice to have you as part of One Shot & Shoot! Appreciate your participating; it definitely helps us.
August 11, 2010 at 9:49 am
Amazing word pictures and perfect photo. I especially love “cleansing daydreams.”
August 11, 2010 at 8:13 pm
Glad you like it, Linda. And thanks for being part of One Stop Poetry! cheers
August 11, 2010 at 10:54 am
They rhythm and flow are great … just like the rain. Makes me wish for a storm. No such luck right now! Thanks for another good one, Dustus.
August 11, 2010 at 5:06 pm
We’ve been hit bad with storms today, Jamie. Think it’s all finally cleared out though.
cheers
August 11, 2010 at 11:03 am
Simple pleasures…and a good bout of rain is always among them. I’m hoping the storm we’ve got brewing outside right now sticks around for a while. Very refreshing–plus, there’s always the hope it will get rid of some of this bloody humidity!
Great visuals and flow. “Brimming wonder.. Shuttering shot.. Cleansing Daydreams” Wonderful words.
And as a P.S…you didn’t let the poor camera get soaked did you?
August 11, 2010 at 5:08 pm
You, my friend, are writing some great poems. LOL most of the camera was covered in a small plastic Meijer bag for the shot.
August 12, 2010 at 11:42 am
Why thank you sir! You honor me, and it means a lot coming from such a talented writer as yourself.
August 11, 2010 at 11:30 am
“Taps give into thunder
Sky tears apart
Missing ozone
Wet land heart”
Nicely written and liked the above lines Adam. You made think of hurricane Katrina almost like you were saying run for cover it’s coming 🙂 Thanks for sharing and cheers~
August 11, 2010 at 5:10 pm
Hi Julliette. Glad you pointed that out… “wet land heart” makes me think of Katrina too. Thanks for noticing that 🙂 Great work today!
August 11, 2010 at 11:32 am
The way you start this is really great. Totally sets the tone for the rest of the piece. Nice work indeed!
August 11, 2010 at 8:15 pm
Thank you, Steven. Grateful for the kind feedback.
August 11, 2010 at 11:52 am
I loved the rhythm of this poem – it added the perfect accompaniment to the rain.
August 11, 2010 at 5:54 pm
Appreciate your feedback and work, Talon. Thanks!
August 11, 2010 at 12:53 pm
This is magic with words, Adam!! It’s so bright and sunny here right now in the Big Apple…but while reading your poem, I was instantly transported back to my rainy, splashy Bombay days – Murphy’s laws in action FULL TIME! No umbrella = heavy rain, bla bla 🙂 And flailing arms out of bus and car windows to feel the raindrops splosh on your palms… sidewalks had an added charm when it rained!!! Rivulets later merging to form puddles, cars going over and drenching me completely!! heheh…fun times!
Such a lovely poem this is… Read it a few times, to have the images fill up my mind 😀
A sweet one shot!
August 11, 2010 at 5:57 pm
Cool… Hope you’re having a blast in The Big Apple, Kavita!!! Still pondering the 160 he he… Thank You 🙂
August 11, 2010 at 1:27 pm
Refreshing! Thank you.
August 11, 2010 at 8:15 pm
Thank you as well 🙂
August 11, 2010 at 1:28 pm
Joined one stop today,
Great poem love any thing to do with rain, the sea, water, so you had me right from the title and the photo, it just got better from there.
Joanny
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/2010/08/afternoon-of-unexpected-delight.html
August 11, 2010 at 5:58 pm
Your post was awesome, joanny—as usual.
August 11, 2010 at 3:27 pm
Mrs. MM and I still love to puddle jump. Great description of the cleansing rain.
August 11, 2010 at 6:00 pm
Thanks, Mrs. MM. I’m a puddle-jumper myself 🙂
August 11, 2010 at 4:40 pm
Great visuals here. As a recent transplant to Southern California from Hawai’i, I really miss the rain!!! Love the way the rhythm adds to the rainy feeling of the poem.
August 11, 2010 at 8:17 pm
Jenna, enjoying for One Shot posts! Thanks for stopping by and commenting. Keep up the great work. cheers
August 11, 2010 at 4:44 pm
Awesome visuals in this Adam…Brilliant poem…feels like I want to jump puddles now…raining here:) Hugs x
August 11, 2010 at 6:01 pm
Make sure you make the biggest splash possible, Amanda 🙂 lol hugs
August 11, 2010 at 5:32 pm
TOTALLY great photograph– wow! Time to save/ what you forgot– you definitely got me with that line. Nicely done!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
August 11, 2010 at 6:03 pm
Thanks, M. Great post today! You’re very skilled with forms. Enjoy reading your poetry.
August 11, 2010 at 5:47 pm
I love those bouncing drops! Marvellous photo…did you lie down amongst those raindrops to capture that photo? Listen to the rhythm of the falling rain (as Adam daydreams his poetry to life lying prone with a camera on the sidewalk)This is a great visual of a visual in the making. 🙂 Heartspell
August 11, 2010 at 6:08 pm
LOL needless to say, my neighbors think I’m a bit weird—I totally understand. No worries. lol cheers, heartspell
August 11, 2010 at 10:39 pm
I awakened to rain this morning. Thus your poem is but a memory after a long hot day. Refreshing to read and remember.
August 12, 2010 at 9:53 am
Leslie, it’s about the thunderstorm here yet again. Planned a little trip for the weekend and hope the weather turns nice. fingers crossed. lol
August 12, 2010 at 9:32 am
What a treat to hear the poet read his own work! I really enjoyed this, Adam. There is something about the cadence of it that reminds me of the rain you’re writing about. Beautifully done! (and i LOVE the accompanying picture!)
August 12, 2010 at 9:57 am
Thanks, shay. Mad respect for your poetic artistry and commentary. cheers!
August 12, 2010 at 10:35 am
I’m a huge fan of the storms..!! 🙂 Love the poem Dustus, and listening to it in your own voice was an added treat..!!
Cheers..!
August 12, 2010 at 10:40 am
Thanks, Ilakya 🙂 I’m a fan of storms too, with the exception of storms occurring while on vacation. lol Hoping the weather improves here. cheers
August 12, 2010 at 12:29 pm
i have just one word…
brilliaaantttt……..!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
and the exclamations mean wat they are meant to be 😀
awesome pic tooo 😀
August 12, 2010 at 1:20 pm
Meg! *smiles* I dig the new look of the Megzone 🙂
http://megzone.wordpress.com/
August 12, 2010 at 4:49 pm
Hi, really evocative poem and photo. I can feel the rain – it’s great.
August 12, 2010 at 8:51 pm
Hey Lawrence. As a novelist/blogger, I encourage you to try some Flash 55s. It’s really good practice. Think it’s helping to improve my writing. cheers
August 12, 2010 at 5:52 pm
Really like this one Adam…reminded me of when I was a child watching the rain fall near my home…thanks for the warm memory.
August 12, 2010 at 8:58 pm
Thanks for sharing your excellent work with everyone. I keep trying to read my poetry because of the inspiring example you set through yours. Cheers, Charles
http://slpmartin.wordpress.com/
August 12, 2010 at 9:45 pm
Just received your book “In & Out of Line and am elated:):):) x
August 12, 2010 at 10:46 pm
*smiles* and heartfelt thanks, Amanda. :):):) Hope you like it.
August 13, 2010 at 3:16 am
I’m never disappointed when I stop by this blog to have a read, and this is no exception. Very nice vision comes to my mind in full surround sound…raindrops on the sidewalk have a soothing white noise effect on my ears; I could hear them as I read.
August 13, 2010 at 11:30 am
Thanks, Tracy. You have a great blog that keeps getting better. Cheers!
August 13, 2010 at 9:45 am
another superb pic. by the way, i really adore your pix, they are not mere compliments.
your words painted rain perfectly.
August 13, 2010 at 11:32 am
I know you’re sincere, trisha. Everyone knows that 🙂 Have a wonderful weekend!
cheers 🙂
August 13, 2010 at 6:17 pm
Wow.
I’ve never seen blogland so ineractive before.
It’s wonderful.
I really like this poem.
I cared for a reading with this one.
Great job
August 13, 2010 at 6:18 pm
interactive. lol
August 15, 2010 at 9:04 am
Hey K! It’s going to get more interactive, for sure; especial with the Arts Web Show making its mark on the ‘Net!
August 13, 2010 at 9:31 pm
Ahhh, natures faucets are at it again, and the never-ending talent of Adam shines through the clouds.
GORGEOUS pic too!
xo
August 15, 2010 at 9:06 am
Hi Jannie. Thanks. Hope you’re having a great weekend!
cheers, Funster 🙂
August 14, 2010 at 12:15 pm
That photo captures exactly what it was like here the other day! The rain came down in sheets!
Pain that washed
imagining free….. lovely lines indeed!
August 15, 2010 at 9:08 am
Hi Linda. thank you. I’m enjoying the last days of some time off at the moment. Having a wonderful time 🙂 cheers
August 19, 2010 at 4:45 pm
I love rain on the sidewalk….
u r an amazing writer…
keep rolling
viva la vida 🙂
August 19, 2010 at 7:22 pm
Viva la vida! Love that phrase. Thank you!