Shivering
Emotions uniting
Wind song through trees
Breeze stirs lake lapping
Shivering sighs, trembling leaves
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Reminder: New Dustus Friday post…
One Stop Poetry @ midnight EST.
Thank You.
August 5, 2010 at 9:17 am
there is something very sensual in these lines dustus…or maybe that is just my mood this morning…tight write..you are pretty good at these 4 lines…
August 5, 2010 at 9:25 am
Good call… enjoying these 4 lines too… thanks, Bri (Excellent day yesterday!)
August 5, 2010 at 11:27 pm
What Brian said π
August 5, 2010 at 9:28 am
I’ve recently subscribed to you blog feed….
Very touching poetry…
Β€hugsΒ€
Lauri
August 5, 2010 at 9:31 am
Thanks, Lauri! Enjoy your day π
August 5, 2010 at 11:20 am
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August 5, 2010 at 12:51 pm
Adam…you’ve created a very clear scene with these few lines so very well…and spiced it with emotion…well done.
August 5, 2010 at 2:52 pm
Finding it a fun challenge to concentrate on 4 lines, Charles. thank you
August 5, 2010 at 2:19 pm
Chilly–shivers–poem. Nice.
August 5, 2010 at 2:50 pm
shiver-me-timbers. lol π
August 5, 2010 at 2:30 pm
Wow… you made it look like the trees, lake, wind formed a human body experiencing a strong emotion
Extremely well-written! The analogy is brilliant!
August 5, 2010 at 2:54 pm
Hey Kavita! In addition to writing splendidly, you are also a very attentive reader. Thank you for that π
August 5, 2010 at 3:32 pm
Hi Adam, good poem that actually made me shiver and feel cold.
August 5, 2010 at 7:23 pm
Hi Lawrence. Tried writing a few new “four lines” after revisiting my novel notebooksβ discovered many short works and scribbled lines, brief sketches about topics that were off-topic at that time. lol Hope your enjoying working on your new novel. I’m trying to make time to work on mine. Cheers!
August 5, 2010 at 3:45 pm
;0 very well written Adam, thank you for visiting me
August 5, 2010 at 7:27 pm
Hi, William π Was great to see you in the One Shot gang this week. If you speak to Viola, please tell her our thoughts are with her and her family. I posted a candle in memory of Larry when I heard the news. It’s still on the home page and makes me sad each time I see it.
Thank you
August 5, 2010 at 10:20 pm
I felt the cold down my spine in this Adam….very good as always x
August 6, 2010 at 7:59 am
Hey Amanda. Thanks for always stopping by with kind words. Have an excellent day!
August 5, 2010 at 10:31 pm
wow!
August 6, 2010 at 7:57 am
thanks π
August 6, 2010 at 11:37 am
Lovely personification here, Adam. Are your leaves feeling any warmer and have your sighs quieted? I picture this tree as very strong against the cold harsh winters of life. π Heartspell
August 6, 2010 at 1:00 pm
At present, my leaves are warm and sighs quiet. lol Michigan winters are tough sometimes, though I absolutely love the snow! Happy belated birthday, heartspell π
August 6, 2010 at 11:37 am
I see the trembling leaves in the morning, stirring up emotions.
lovely poem!
π
August 6, 2010 at 1:02 pm
I enjoy mornings, especially when breezes animate the foliage.
Thanks, Jingle π
August 6, 2010 at 11:38 am
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/08/06/family-fridays-posts-in-blogs-form-a-show-celebrating-dorazs-2-years-blogging-fun/
two awards on the bottom for you,
please join the party in celebrating Doraz’s 2 year blogging fun.
thanks for the attention!
π
August 6, 2010 at 1:05 pm
I’ve been bad about awards lately, and mean no disrespect to anyone. It’s been a hectic past couple of weeks in many ways. However, so glad to hear our friend Doraz is still making us smile and laugh. Excellent!
August 9, 2010 at 11:41 am
just awesome. loved the pic of your “one stop poetry” post, hats off to your photographies.
August 9, 2010 at 8:57 pm
Thanks, trisha. Working on the One Stop has been great. Enjoying the team effort of it.
August 21, 2010 at 8:43 am
i have read some poems in other blogs- they are fabulous. have fun. π
August 9, 2010 at 5:13 pm
A very creative 4 lines. I have always said a few words is sometimes worth a thousand words. You have expressed your thoughts very well Adam.
August 9, 2010 at 9:00 pm
Viola, a few words are indeed worth a thousand sometimes. In fact, a few words can be priceless π