Four Lines (1)
Dew drops bead morning dandelions
Her tears glisten bloodshot eyes
Fumbling thoughts through hours pass
Derailing nighttime tracks of time
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I plan to post my One Stop Poetry Friday offering @ 12 am EST. This week’s poem is called “Forever Band” (photo by me from MSU campus). Hope you enjoy it!
One Stop Poetry
July 29, 2010 at 10:49 am
wwowoowww… brilliant lines Adam 😀
lots of depth and most importantly its short n sweet jus 4lines 😀
i used to write once upon a time..
sigh!!! lost touch now..
now everything goes a minimum of 10-12 lines 😛
July 29, 2010 at 10:57 am
Megzone!!! Miss you. Don’t worry about losing touch. You were posting so much. No worries 🙂 Enjoy your summer a bit before jumping back into the mix. Have some fun 🙂 cheerios
July 29, 2010 at 10:50 am
oh my…..
but lovely lines 🙂
July 29, 2010 at 10:58 am
Thank you 🙂 glad you like
July 29, 2010 at 11:46 am
Brilliant:)
July 29, 2010 at 4:42 pm
Thanks! 🙂
July 29, 2010 at 12:14 pm
Your poem says a lot in 4 lines. I honestly love it. Its very beautiful.
July 29, 2010 at 4:44 pm
Thank you, Suzie. Thanks for sharing your nice comment.
cheers
July 29, 2010 at 12:45 pm
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July 29, 2010 at 1:02 pm
Shot and sweet Adam
Wow time passes quickly in a four line poem
looking forward to Friday
July 29, 2010 at 4:41 pm
Time flies when you’re having fun… and when tweaking code in blogger. lol
Nice work today, L., especially Vortex.
July 29, 2010 at 2:39 pm
Oh maaannn! That was deep! That’s the story of an entire lifetime, IN 4 LINES!
Excellent work, Adam! You totally rock!
July 29, 2010 at 4:39 pm
Thanks, Kavita. Curious to see what everyone’s posting today. Hope to be around in a bit 🙂
July 29, 2010 at 2:57 pm
What an awesome poem…Your light shines soooo bright my friend. x
July 29, 2010 at 4:38 pm
Thanks, Amanda. Hope you’re having a great day! 🙂
July 29, 2010 at 3:28 pm
wow, powerful lines…
Re; thanks for reading my blogger account,
hope that you are NOT offended with the name Adam…
July 29, 2010 at 4:28 pm
NOT at all, my friend, I kind of like the name Adam. lol
Thanks 🙂 Hope to visit some blogs asap. Speaking of Blogger, been given me fits this afternoon. No worries though 🙂
cheers
July 29, 2010 at 6:57 pm
Y’know, those dew dropped dandelions could be early morning sleep in a pretty gal’s long lashes. I love the way the structure and juxtaposition of your words play with my imagination, Adam.
July 29, 2010 at 11:05 pm
Nice way to think of the those first lines. Thanks, Tony.
July 29, 2010 at 9:15 pm
powerful images in just a few short lines.
July 29, 2010 at 11:06 pm
Glad you like it, Suzicate. cheers
July 29, 2010 at 9:54 pm
Whoa, thanks to Kavita posting a link I was able to find your blog again!
Good work with just 4 lines.
July 29, 2010 at 11:08 pm
Hi Cin. That was nice of Kavita. Thanks for following the link. Appreciate that and your comment. Cheers
July 30, 2010 at 8:41 am
Wow. You packed a heap of feeling into four lines, Adam. The use of the dandelion in this, it being a weed, is a cool touch. This sadness that “derails nighttime tracks of time”. Ahhhhh! How human.
July 30, 2010 at 10:12 am
I always appreciate how you notice the details in my lines! Thanks so much, Leslie. Have a great weekend!
August 12, 2010 at 5:28 pm
So much power in brevity. Like how the tracks of time are “nighttime”