Next Time Expected
Benny faces thug Finneran expecting another beating; good hand shaking as if about to lose the farm doubling down. Benny’s keys rattle changing owners—goodbye silver Jag.
“They’re you go, Buddy.” Finneran threatens mockingly, “More than a gambling problem next time. You’ll turn-up DOA. Capice?”
Benny’s recurverate hand held onto heartburn, “Won’t be a next time, Fin.”
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July 19, 2010 at 9:17 am
Wow this is quite the story Adam.
But my question will there be a next time????
I love 55s – you rock at it
July 19, 2010 at 9:30 am
Guess the answer to that might be in the cards. lol Hey Leslie. Thanks 🙂
Also ,was just over at One Stop. Wow, some great guest posts!
http://oneshotpoetry.blogspot.com/
July 19, 2010 at 10:02 am
ooo chilling 55…hope there isnt…you can def lose more than your shirt…
July 19, 2010 at 10:26 am
You said it…. Can’t afford those kinds of problems, literally. I’m not a fan of gambling, the exceptions being taking part in Superbowl pool or the brackets for March Madness. Aside from that, betting doesn’t interest me.
July 19, 2010 at 4:23 pm
OUCH!! That was wicked, Adam!!!
Never tried a 55 before.. you inspire me! This was great!
July 20, 2010 at 7:41 am
Try it, Kavita! I think your style of poetry would lend itself very well to a 55. Give it a shot. Thanks 🙂
July 20, 2010 at 5:55 pm
Oohh.. Now I gotta try it! 🙂 Thanks for the encouragement, Adam!!!
July 19, 2010 at 5:54 pm
I like this.
Perhaps i should get around to trying it a bit faster. lol
July 20, 2010 at 7:42 am
With all the hats you wear, you might have too. lol
July 19, 2010 at 7:05 pm
Whoohoo..good one!!! You are so very talented and it shines through every single time!!
July 20, 2010 at 7:44 am
Thanks, Amanda. Always appreciate your kind encouragement 🙂
July 19, 2010 at 8:25 pm
I almost died in a few poker games myself.
Well, not really, but I could have. 🙂
Well told and chillingly so.
xo
July 20, 2010 at 7:48 am
Ha ha! You should write a song about it…. Back in college, I avoided death through card games. lol
July 19, 2010 at 8:46 pm
lol 🙂 Love it. You have got to watch those Italians. lol 🙂
July 20, 2010 at 7:50 am
Minding my own business on this comment, D. lol
Have an awesome week!
July 20, 2010 at 12:19 pm
Hey….what’s the matter???? lol 🙂
July 19, 2010 at 9:23 pm
Congratulations on the award..You Rock! x
July 20, 2010 at 12:02 am
Reminded me of a scene from a movie…very enjoyable.
July 20, 2010 at 7:58 am
Glad you like it, Charles. Going to be trying out new material on the blog to see what works and what doesn’t. Thanks 🙂
July 20, 2010 at 2:06 am
Chilling! Whoa . . . 🙂
July 20, 2010 at 8:00 am
Thanks, Jamie. It’s an enjoyable challenge to try to fit a past, future, and ironic twists in 55 words. Truly a fun form 🙂
July 20, 2010 at 9:35 am
nice 55.
Happy Tuesday!
July 20, 2010 at 5:10 pm
Happy Tuesday, Jingle!
TY
July 21, 2010 at 10:00 am
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July 21, 2010 at 11:38 am
nice .. 🙂
July 21, 2010 at 1:48 pm
TY 🙂
July 21, 2010 at 12:21 pm
thats an awesome 55 …
July 21, 2010 at 1:48 pm
Thanks 🙂
July 21, 2010 at 12:22 pm
Ooo-gambling can turn ugly…My limit is 15 cents…bkm
July 21, 2010 at 1:48 pm
I’m good for about a dollar. lol
July 21, 2010 at 1:31 pm
V.Cool my friend!
http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/
July 21, 2010 at 1:58 pm
Always enjoy your lyrical style, M. Glad to see you link up for One Stop Poetry!
July 21, 2010 at 8:14 pm
poker game is risky but people just love risky thing:3~ don’t they? =P Thank for sharing such a wonderful 55~ I love it ;D
July 22, 2010 at 7:22 am
Lots of people addicted to gambling, especially online.
Glad you enjoyed the 55 🙂
July 21, 2010 at 8:53 pm
Very nice…never tried flash 55…reading urs makes me want to try it:) enjoyed it:)
July 22, 2010 at 7:24 am
Go for it! I think I may enjoy this form better than poetry. Tough call. Give it a try and let me know how it goes. Thanks 🙂
July 21, 2010 at 10:45 pm
I like this!
July 22, 2010 at 4:14 am
Great !!
July 22, 2010 at 7:26 am
Thanks irradiatedpoetry & ladynimue…. I’m going to keep trying to write a 55 once a week (usually at the end of the week after my Friday post on One Stop Poetry). Thanks for the feedback. Cheers!
July 22, 2010 at 2:02 pm
I don’t know if this was supposed to be funny, but I found it morbidly hilarious. Good work, I especially enjoyed how it feels like a real conversation.
July 22, 2010 at 2:38 pm
Thanks! I’ve watched way too many gangster movies 🙂
July 22, 2010 at 5:37 pm
but we know there will be a next time… unless the heartburn’s really a heart attack… poor Benny.
July 23, 2010 at 12:12 pm
Exactly, Doni. While Benny’s hand is injured and curved back toward his chest, the line could also read as a very bad sign healthwise. Thanks, Man
July 23, 2010 at 4:20 am
Reminds me of all those B & W films I watched as a young one — James Cagney movies… a good 55er — amazing really saying it so succinctly, with out compromise or losing the essence of the tone of the poem.
Nicely done.
Joanny
from thursdays rally
http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/2010/07/dance-of-fire-el-amor-brujo.html
July 23, 2010 at 12:15 pm
“You dirty Rat!”… “You won’t take me alive, Copper!” LOL
I love those old movies. That’s cool the 55 reminds you of that. Thanks, Joanny.
July 24, 2010 at 9:47 pm
Very succinct yet clear. I can see both men and the fear in Benny.
July 25, 2010 at 11:18 am
Thanks for the feedback, Morganna. Glad you could envision it 🙂
cheers
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