This Evensong

Skeletal frame
Oil drained
Engine well
Scorched-out Ford
Scavenged upholstery
On cinder blocks
Picked clean of doors

Know not easy
More than wrong
Sunset spreads
This evensong

Tumbling fall
Alternate crash
No big deal
Don’t care to ask

Leveled from pain
Front end smashed
Going nowhere
Lightening flash

Last rites
Baby cries
Lives in lines
Pennies on eyes
Singing choir
Tearful sighs
Through all of life
Must say goodbyes


20 Responses to “This Evensong”

  1. Dustus this post is awesome, and I enjoyed reading it very much.

  2. Your word selection makes this poem flow and makes it easy to see. Thanks! πŸ™‚

  3. This poem poured out and felt good to write. Thanks, Doraz πŸ™‚

  4. nature is cool,
    it is from your heart,
    beautiful flow,
    Happy Tuesday to you!

  5. Jingle! Thanks. Appreciative of nature and going with the flow. A wonderful day to you! πŸ™‚

  6. Car crash? It sounds like a cystertian hymn, or a mantra, very enjoyable! Thanks as always for your comments Adam. Evensong, a very clever play on words πŸ™‚

  7. I was in a car crash one afternoon back in high school, as part of providing community serviceβ€””Mobile Meals”β€” for the elderly. My friend and I were so lucky. Thank goodness for air bags! The driver of the other car reeked of liquor and was not arrested. Thanks, Shan πŸ™‚

  8. aawww… that was such a heart-wrenching poem.. 😦
    nice flow of words but πŸ™‚
    the picture built up as i kept reading..
    beautiful imagery..

    • Thanks, Meg. No picture prompt this time. lol Glad it conjures images during the read. Given a bit sad, but from the heart. cheerios

  9. Dustus, I am shocked the police didn’t arrest him. That is why so many people are killed. The police slap them on the you know what and say go ahead get in the car and do it again, but next time take a life. I don’t know where you are from but that really upsets me the man didn’t go to jail. You should report that police officer.

  10. You’re right. It happened a very long time ago before the crack down on drunk driving. Still bothers me. The laws are much stricter now, and in some states there is literally little tolerance (no pun intended).

  11. An excellent poem with very strong images in it…I loved the words selected for this poem…kudos!

  12. Working with images all the time is definitely influencing the lines. Thanks for commenting on word choice πŸ™‚

  13. I read this through three times I liked it so well. By the time I got to the bottom I was sensing this swaying rhythmn. Nice way to paint a picture, Adam!

    • πŸ™‚ Lately, I’ve been trying to approach my poetry differentlyβ€” changing the cadence in subtle ways & being more experimental with image layers. Very glad you like it, Leslie.

  14. I like it — it reminds me of the opening scene of one of my books!

  15. wonderful. you portrayed a breezy sketch of desolation-end.

  16. Thanks, Trisha. I have trouble saying goodbye to people.

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