Nothing I Can Explain
Dusk amber mellow
Old feelings hush
This quiet night
Being out of touch
You were right
Thought too much
Knowing now
Wasn’t luck
Steady highway sounds
Rush hour passage found
Like ocean waves crashing
Upon sturdy shoulders
Happy, laughing
Water splashing
Seagulls circle
Safe all landings
Could have been only five
Sun glare squinting open eyes
Closer to the sky I was
Beating any birthday surprise
While lives remain different
Never wanted moments the same
What always seems to stop me now
Nothing I can explain
March 23, 2010 at 9:01 am
I’m sure as we get older we overanalyze things. Recently I’ve spent hours trying to get to sleep, but walking within the depths of my own memory becomes a hobby of mine. I can miander until the sun comes up, which probably accounts for the black circles under my eyes. Nothing stops you apart from yourself, I’m the expert at this!
March 23, 2010 at 10:12 am
brilliant write… I just loved how expressive it is… powerful imagery…
March 23, 2010 at 10:22 am
Rajlakshmi, thank you. You’re work is inspiring. I love how you combine poems with visual art. Thanks for the visit 🙂 Have a wonderful day!
March 23, 2010 at 10:19 am
Hi Shan. Wearing glasses magnifies the dark memory circles under my eyes. lol Thanks for sharing your thoughts. You reminded me of what a lifelong friend of mine said to me way back in the day, “The greatest obstacle in life is yourself. Overcome it, and you will achieve the greatest accomplishment of all.” I think I was about seven when I began considering that statement. It has stuck with me 🙂
Some context on the poem: This was written after I had a phone conversation with my dad. I was sitting in front of the computer, kicking back and thinking, relishing the fact that he said he was proud of me. Those words seemed to reduce me to feeling like a kid again for an instant. I was on top of the world. This piece is also about one of my earliest fond memories. There are a few personal jokes in this one, really a testament to my father’s sense of humor. Cheers.
March 23, 2010 at 11:12 am
wwwoooowww…that was a good one adam..
loved the closing lines the most 🙂
March 23, 2010 at 11:51 am
Thanks, Megz! Always grateful. I know I’m doing something right when you like them 🙂
March 23, 2010 at 12:05 pm
Excellent job Adam…the simplicity of the lines was very effective.
March 23, 2010 at 3:06 pm
Thanks. Been inspired of late!
March 23, 2010 at 1:10 pm
i’m right in tht moment w/u or at least w/the poem. it’s amazing what it can do when you’re dad says he’s proud of u. i remember tht day. it was one of the last things he said 2 me.
great poem.
~IS
March 23, 2010 at 2:58 pm
Wow. I’m so glad you two shared that moment.
March 23, 2010 at 3:47 pm
I can hear yourwords/sounds when I read this poem. hush- highway sounds- Rush hour- ocean waves- laughing- Water splashing-Seagulls circle. Wonderful!
Gerardine
March 23, 2010 at 4:14 pm
Hi Geradine! Thanks. Super cool you reflect on the sound of it. That makes my day 🙂
March 23, 2010 at 5:34 pm
that last line rocks socks….great mixture of textures in this one..
March 23, 2010 at 5:53 pm
Thanks, Brian 🙂
March 23, 2010 at 9:08 pm
Steady highway sounds
Rush hour passage found
Like ocean waves crashing
Upon sturdy shoulders
Happy, laughing
Water splashing
Seagulls circle
Safe all landings
I really like this SO MUCH, how you describe your emotions so vividly . Excellent poem! One of my favorite , dare I say your writing is improving tremendously. Keep it up , Adam. You know it is not LUCK when your writing is good, it is a lot of hard work and experiences in life that gives you the best foundation for expressing them through your writings . Bravo!
Happy Wednesday! hugs shakira HAVE YOU A BOMBASTIC WEEK!
March 24, 2010 at 6:39 am
shakira, you rock. I think blogging has definitely helped improve my writing—for sure! When I started, I had this sink or swim attitude before I got the hang of it. After 18 months, I look forward to posting whenever I can. Here I am allowed to be creative both literally and visually. Love it!
Thanks for all the nice things you said 🙂
happy wednesday!!!
hugs
March 24, 2010 at 2:52 am
This is simply awesome. fabulous. just loved it. you really described your emotions beautifully.
March 24, 2010 at 6:31 am
You’re encouragement means a lot to me, Trisha. Thanks. Writing in all forms helps me make sense of my emotions 🙂
March 24, 2010 at 2:27 pm
well put!
Happy Wednesday!
thank you for the participation!
😉
March 24, 2010 at 7:13 pm
Look forward to participating 🙂
March 24, 2010 at 6:22 pm
I love it!
The poem is beautiful!
You have lot of talent to express all these feelings and toughts!
THank you for share it! 🙂
Have a wonderful day!! 🙂
March 24, 2010 at 6:44 pm
You are kind, Alina. Thank you so much 🙂
March 24, 2010 at 6:39 pm
A really profound poem. I didn’t know the context (the phone conversation with your dad) until I read through the comments, but I liked the phrases, particularly in the opening. Excellent stuff.
March 24, 2010 at 7:11 pm
Thanks, Lawrence. Appreciate that. Let me share this: what really makes me enjoy this poem is that it ends with a joke, something he actually said that had us both laughing at my expense. Priceless moment. 🙂 Cheers
March 25, 2010 at 3:28 am
All has been said….Great post.
March 25, 2010 at 6:43 am
Thank you, Emmanuel.
March 26, 2010 at 9:42 am
i love it Adam..it’s so deep..i kinda felt the ocean waves bursting in my face, lovely read! keep writing! cheers..:))))
March 26, 2010 at 10:58 am
Glad it inspires. I know how dedicated you are to your words; so thanks, Abeer 🙂 Write on!
March 28, 2010 at 8:17 am
Lovely poem! I particularly like the happy laughing water splashing – what a great memory to have and to carry with you. Thanks for sharing it Dustus!
March 28, 2010 at 8:46 am
Been a bit nostalgic lately. That is one of my favorite memories. I grew up by the ocean and always think of the water when recalling back then 🙂 Have a wonderful Sunday!